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October 10, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Brilliant story, more please. The identity of the turtle in question is definitely Raphael as he is the one with the attitude in the team, curses a lot and has no patience. I have got to say I think you have written him beautifully I immediately knew it was Raphael as soon as I started reading. As I have said already you have written him beautifully and got his personality down to a T. MORE PLEASE!
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March 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I gotta know if there was a part two to this cause it was just too good. Funny, steamy and hot just the way I like my stories
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November 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hot!
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November 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Came here because of your comments on the yahoo board. I basically read the story, though I skipped some parts because it just isn't my thing.
Your word usage is way above average. Very pleasant. Your spelling/grammar is also pleasant; no mistakes jumped out at me.
Your weakness is the same as most of the above-average but not professional writers of my experience - lack of details. For this particular story, you need much more explication of the woman's thoughts and emotions. She just accepts the situation much too easily. We need more background on him, too, although his thoughts are better represented.
Also, a transition. Since I can't see the story from this page, I can't tell you exactly, but something about the transition from the stage to backstage is confusingly brief.
Your word usage is way above average. Very pleasant. Your spelling/grammar is also pleasant; no mistakes jumped out at me.
Your weakness is the same as most of the above-average but not professional writers of my experience - lack of details. For this particular story, you need much more explication of the woman's thoughts and emotions. She just accepts the situation much too easily. We need more background on him, too, although his thoughts are better represented.
Also, a transition. Since I can't see the story from this page, I can't tell you exactly, but something about the transition from the stage to backstage is confusingly brief.
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August 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This was such a well written piece! Very detailed and quite hot. ;) And the identity of the turtle, God, only a paragraph into the story and I was already thinking, "Watch it be Raphael" and I believe I am correct! Heh, I mean, c'mon. Who else wears the trenchcoat and goes out to drink at seedy bars? Anyway, great job!
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January 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Three words to describe this fic. HOT! HOT! HOT! So without looking at the other reviews I think the turtle in question must be Leonardo. If I remember the TMNT correctly...I have not seen this series in ages, the '90's be exact...lol. I have seen the newest version on tv on saturday mornings rarely, however, the series is to me just as good as the '90's version. If the turtle in question is wrong let me know. This was so erotic and so sensual. Along with the other fics I have read on this site I will add yours to my favorites list.
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June 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
re-read this today.......love this one!!think i need to sit down......maybe a cold shower.....anyway:A+
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April 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Love the story, nothing like some good turtle smut!
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March 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Holy shit that was hot!
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December 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
it's definently Raph