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for Street Magic

by Malcore

person Tohma Seguchi
schedule April 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was so cute at the end of chapter 3. I hope that Raven eventually gets her body back to normal. I wouldn't be able to live like that if I was her. Being that small again would be a pain. Star was cute in chapter two when they were buying cloths she was like the mother and Raven was her daughter. They are all being fair when it comes to Raven's state that she should be greatful. Oh well can't wait for the nect update.
person Raven
schedule April 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
damn dude, thats great, i hope theres more to it, the only problems were the 3-4 typos i noticed *puts it on favs to wait for more*
person fgh
schedule April 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
cool story
person capcomfreak4life
schedule March 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awesome! it is to be continued, right? i know it has to. this may be AFF, with the sex and all, but the little girl has to have her happy ending, won't she?
person juraijin1
schedule March 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I found the concept of the entire fic to be amusing. I enjoyed the little bit of spanking play, and Raven's accident(poor girl), and would like to see a bit more if at all possible. I will admit that I had some misgivings about the sex scene, but it is your story, and I just skimed over that part. I so enjoy this kind of story where chrarcters are thrust into humilating circumstaces, as long as it's not rape. Please give us more quickly.
person Shard
schedule February 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really got into the plot even though I didn't think I would. I'm looking foward to your next chapter and hope you update soon.
person LoveGuardian
schedule February 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Poor Raven. She has to go through this for three his story is funny, and you should update it soon. Awesome job!
person LoveGuardian
schedule February 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
My post got screwed up. I meant to say that I feel sorry that she has to go through this for three months. By the way, I thought that the scene at the mall was really funny.
person DKN
schedule February 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story! Poor Raven...Could you finish it as soon as possible, please?
person Doc Trebian
schedule February 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's an interesting way of looking at things, but it seems a bit... pedo to me.
Still, written well and could be very much amusing depending upon where it goes.