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wow i really wish i had read this sooner. such a good story. you should write more of these

MEEEEEEEEOOOOWWWWW!!!!!!!!! Your story is good! My friend origanally dared me to read this, but it's pretty good. She's not used to writing porno, I guess. HA HA HA.

If i were you, I wouldn't listen to these nerds. It was a good fic and i liked it. Reading smut for literary content and not the sex is like watching beavis and butthead and trying to find intelligent thought provoking content. =)

I should have known by the title of the story that this was gong to be tasteless, but I like to experiement so I went ahead and began to read. Right around the third paragraph, I should of taken the 'lesbian' screen as a warning flag of tastlessness to come, but I didn't. To my dismay, the story progresses into this downward spiral or hideous smut and B-rate pornography. However, I am here to cure you of that, for you could have potential for better things. One thing you need to consider is before two completely polar opposite characters go to 'get it on', you should begin with character development. Even though most of us know who Starfire and Raven are, you need to demonstrate that you can keep them in context with unrelated events prior to the 'smut scene'. Not only do you show that you can keep the characters IN character, but you'll also be able to give plot points that lead to the attraction. Do you know what I find missing in most of the Raven/Starfire fanfics that I've read? Raven and Starfire! Keep that in mind, try again, and good luck.

nice

I find that it was shaky, with a weak plot start, and repetitive in language and nature. The imagery, also, was crude at points: The result was at best something like an amateur porn. Complete, may I add, with the infamous 80's riff. In anycase, the title fits.