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by jameswritingfun

person nightlight
schedule October 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
pretty good idea for a story plot, but but it looks as if you were in a hurry to finish it.
the punctuations need just a little work as does the sentance fluency. im not trying to criticize you or anything,
just thought youd like to know.