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April 14, 2019 at 12:00 AM
Also mostly vanished. First paragraph remains, the rest is gone.
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September 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
its good i only found one little problem with it in the story when robin and star fire are listening you mention that the've gone at it before while later in the fic they act like they've never been together other than the small oversight great fic bb is my Fave char lol only way could be better if they would of gave bb cyborgs brawn somehow lol
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July 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Jozepy like it
it wasnt to long
jozepy would like to see more
it wasnt to long
jozepy would like to see more
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May 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Read upto chap 3 it was DAMN interesting!
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April 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
keep up the good work
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March 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I only read the first chapter of Repayed, and that was the best! A 9 out of 10!
The other two chapters didn't seem nessesary
The other two chapters didn't seem nessesary
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January 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this was so sweet so good i loved it
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December 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Arrgh. it isn't bad..but.. I've been reading fanfiction for 7 years and people keep making the same mistakes! Bad teminology and the Magical Regenerating Hard-On. Don't DO it! For Christs sake, try to retain some authenticity.
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December 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I forgot to mention;
NEVER EVER do authors notes in the actual fanfiction, put them at the start or at the end, if they're in the actual story, it distrupts the reading.
And.. I assume from your vocabulary and descriptive skills that you have read a book before?
Speech is ALWAYS on a new line.
Although I don't write for this site in particular (i'm on Fanfiction.net) I still think it write to offer criticism.
These two reviews weren't flames, because other than the author notes, speech line problems and the whole 'love juice', 'blow-job' and Out Of Character ness, it wasnt bad.
NEVER EVER do authors notes in the actual fanfiction, put them at the start or at the end, if they're in the actual story, it distrupts the reading.
And.. I assume from your vocabulary and descriptive skills that you have read a book before?
Speech is ALWAYS on a new line.
Although I don't write for this site in particular (i'm on Fanfiction.net) I still think it write to offer criticism.
These two reviews weren't flames, because other than the author notes, speech line problems and the whole 'love juice', 'blow-job' and Out Of Character ness, it wasnt bad.
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September 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
awesome story