rate_review Reviews

Wow.. As a one shot, this was just spellbinding, breathtaking.. I would so love a chapter Two. Please consider it?

you must add another chapter. please i dont have a good imagination.

Some of your reviewers said this wasn't detailed enough. I must disagree. I give this a 10/10 on the kinky scale, and a 10/10 on just being extremely well written. It was beautifuly detailed with amazing emotion. My favorite part was when Robin actually thrusted up into her uterus. That was kinky to the max. Good story here, and I like it as a one-shot.

please update i cant wait please update.

well you could have the rape be a past tense things and set something up like robin deals with it and gets her back - but whatever. this was a good story - i'd give it an 8.

This was a wonderful read; truly a great story, and far better than most of what you might find on this site. A second chapter would be a real treat (and only fitting if it were Robins revenge :D). Your wording was fantastic and your description of the dream, and the after events were superb, as I said before, a great read. You said to leave a rank (I assume 10 is the best) and I'd give it a 10. Seriously a good read - and another chapter would be cool - but if you don't do that, at least keep writing, as you're great at it.

I just finished reading the updated version. I like both, but what I like best about this new one is the more concrete promise of a possible second/concluding chapter.

If it isn't obvious yet, yes, I would love for you to continue this. It just doesn't feel right to leave that sort of ending to our imaginations. We need to see Raven make Robin her "mate". :)

Hi, it's me again; the reviewer above this one. I neglected to give you that rating you asked for, so here it is: I give you a 7.5 out of 10.

You did tremendously for a first time smut-writer, but there were a few superfluities and a small lacking in the desired visuals. The former just means you may have made some parts obscene (which isn't really 'bad') just to make them obscene; AKA "graphic". Just because something is smut doesn't mean it has to be overridden by words like "cunt". I think this word was the one I thought was most overused. Otherwise, it was a fairly good balance between proper anatomy names and obscenity. As for the latter, I can only attest this criticism by saying it took me two or three tries to understand the visual you were trying to evoke for some parts. Particularly towards the end. Not to say it was all bad. On the contrary, I'd say about 80-90% of the visuals you made were clear as day (As well as being erotic, sexy, and just plain hot).

I hope this comes off as helpful criticism and in no way "bashing". I'd hate to think I actually said this story was bad in any way; because you truly are talented.

Here's to hoping your muse bestows upon us a second chapter soon. :)

PS: I would really appreciate having an e-mail notification for any future updates or chapter posts, if it isn't too much trouble to ask. :)

that was frecking alwsome! write some more or another one ROBIN AND RAVEN FOREVER!

wow this was so good update soon