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for First Night Jitters

by Shukumei

person M
schedule May 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
That was good...but it cut out right when it was about to get great. For shame.
schedule January 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I liked this. A lot. My only complaint is the clumping up of paragraphs and how you have multiple speakers in one paragraphs. The writing itself is solid, though. Any chance Terra's going to sleep her way through the rest of the tower?
person Bishonen
schedule January 23, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This was agood read kind of wish you had gone into detail about what happened when Raven joined but that's okay hope you write more like this.

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae