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another totally awsome chapter love the way jo uses house cleaning products to her advantage i know it sting when that stuff gets in your eyes X) keep up the great writing and hope to see another chapter up soon hope victor gets a part!

:Chuckles:

Pinesol? Thats inspired :P

Another enjoyable chaptor in a 12 chapter string of them. Erotic or not, this has got to be one of the most enjoyable works of fiction I've read in some time. I boy my hat to you, milady.

And more chapters = Good, No matter when you decide to post them :P

More terrific chapters, i can't believe how fast you write them ! hmm Joviana helping Doom return from Hades, i assume that you are not a fan of the Unthinkable arc then ? By the way the bit about Mastermind looking like a flasher made me giggle. Her death was very well written i hope we find out how she was brought back to life. I do have one question if i may, would you consider writing more Doom stories in the future?

Totally awsome chapter love the sneakyness of jo and how she was albe to contact victor in time poor dumb toad should not leave door unlocked! keep up the wonderful writing and hope to see another chapter up from you soon!

Very, very well done. The scene of Jovi lowering herself into the water is convincing and creepy, and just like everything else you've written so far, shows her as an extremely complex bundle of bravery, confidence and guile. The "because I liked him" part is what convinces me about her: with her sucky past revealed (very sneaky way of getting it into the plot in a convincing first person, btw), Jovi seems like she would be extremely loyal to both her own causes and anyone who was able to secure her respect and affections. The direct messaging to the computer in Doom's armor was a very nice touch! I've never seen anyone do anything with outside access to his armor, and I'd always assumed it would be a closed system, but the idea of access to a chosen few under intense security is far more interesting and with many more possiblities. I do wonder, tho, just how much "consideration" went into Jovi's declaration of love at the end? Again, a winning combination of possible manipulation for her own ends, and possible true sentiments. You're really quite good at this.

Very, very well done. The scene of Jovi lowering herself into the water is convincing and creepy, and just like everything else you've written so far, shows her as an extremely complex bundle of bravery, confidence and guile. The "because I liked him" part is what convinces me about her: with her sucky past revealed (very sneaky way of getting it into the plot in a convincing first person, btw), Jovi seems like she would be extremely loyal to both her own causes and anyone who was able to secure her respect and affections. The direct messaging to the computer in Doom's armor was a very nice touch! I've never seen anyone do anything with outside access to his armor, and I'd always assumed it would be a closed system, but the idea of access to a chosen few under intense security is far more interesting and with many more possiblities. I do wonder, tho, just how much "consideration" went into Jovi's declaration of love at the end? Again, a winning combination of possible manipulation for her own ends, and possible true sentiments. You're really quite good at this.

Nice try :P

I'm checking this thing once aday now :)

The death scene was quite nifty. The coins were a nice touch. Other than that I gotta say this fanfic is just getting niftier and niftier.

Caught you this time :P


The sideplot with Magneto and Malice is looking quite interesting. I look foreward to finding out how she'll get off the island without Eric finding out.

Your main character has quite a depressing back story (a believable character makes a FAR better story)- she's certainly handled it well though, especially managing to 'smother' an enemy with negative emotions! It's great the way you've brought in Magneto as well- I always thought he was a far better a match for Doctor Doom (if there can be such thing!!) than the Fantastic Four. Can't wait to see how this episode turns out... and don't forget to feed me some of your mushy smut scenes!!! *flutters eyelids and smiles nicely*

Love the way that you have brought in the x men and magneto in to the picture it changes up the flow of thing i like keep up the great work and hope that victor or the F4 get there for her in time