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Hey this is a great fic, I hope you update soon, can't wait to see the big wedding and the wedding night. Your original character is so great, usually writers make original's somewhat boring with no real history, they just seem to be there. Your original has a past and you've done a great job creating her past, and giving her some mystery. Hope you post another chappie soon. I love this fic hope it goes for a long time. :D

Yay! This chapter really helps to explain why Jovi was able to just drop off the face of the earth to work for Doom. But with all the press for the wedding and her new high profile status, couldn't she stir up some of her old connections? (I'm thinking her birth mom, in particular. I'd love to hear some of her story.) Jovi doesn't seem to have many relationships outside of "family" and work. Is this deliberate on her part, or just a side effect of her continual scheming and dogged work ethic? Doom is simply spot on in chap 6, even tho he does remain sadly clad at all times. :( His mental process really is very reminicent of Holmes, I agree w/ Jovi there. I *very* much look forward to the revelation of Doom's college escapades that scarred Richards so much. (Pleasepleaseplease let Reed have walked in on something...)

Totally awsome chapter I loved the background story it really gives life to the other chapter now... keep up the great writing and hope to see another chapter up from you soon! :-)

The plot thickens....as it were :)

Nice bit of background into the main char(not going to try writing the name without a transcript on hand :p) Would I be correct in assuming that her form of genius is based around finding flaws in a given plan? If so thats a rather nifty skill to have, and certainly explains Doom's intrest in her.


Keep up the good work, and thank you for the shout outs.

Demos

The way that you portray the Fantastic Four (particularly Reed) Is realy quite enjoyable.

Its also kind of nice to see an erotic story thats not Totaly focused on sex :P

I look foreward to the next chapter

Yes, we're all looking forward to the next chapters... lots and lots of chapters!! The bit about the surrogate mother was touching- very original! But what I'm REALLY curious about is the part where Sue says that Reed told her (or rather, didn't tell her) things about Doom back in their college days which should make any woman think twice about marrying him... is that simply because he spent too much time inventing machines or for *another* reason?? *raises eyebrows and smiles coyly*

p.s. Thanks for the shout out- it makes reviewing feel more appreciated!! XD

Totally awsome story so far! love the way that you portray victor he is really well done keep up the great writing and hope to see another chapter up from you soon!

Yay! More Jovi! The Plot Thickens.... Now, is it safe to assume from Jovi's disparaging remarks about superheroes (property damage, psychological effects, etc), her apparent mission to do away with them, and her grandmother's implied death when Jovi was seven that her grandmother was killed in some way related to superheroes?
Again, I am very much impressed with Joviana in her own right. There seems to be something about Latveria that attracts manipulators of the first class. Jovi's quasi-mom seems to be a very sweet woman, and I'm sad that she was so upset about her child's death she felt the need for a surrogate. But it does give you another way to portray Doom as a complicated mix of finer sensibilities and unerring devotion to his own ends. Bravo! All in all, chap. 5 has some very delicious revelations, but really nothing more than a taste. *sigh* Please continue. If you were to drop off the face of the earth at this point I would be quite miffed.

Whoo. I'm gong to pretend that this an A/U. Because there's the issue of Valeria and the whole Unthinkable arch would just make this a little too uhm... I don't think Jovvie would be too keen to see her husband come home wearing the armor of his ex-girlfriend, kthx.

This is without a doubt the best Doctor Doom story that i have ever read, i am in awe of your descriptive writing skills. Joviana is an original , intelligent character and i am really starting to enjoy her maniplative side i'm looking forward to seeing what her plans for Doom are. As good as Joviana is it is with Victor where the story really shines the characterization is simply perfect. The sex scene was erotic but not gratuitous i look forward to the wedding (i wonder if she will wear white ?) and the wedding night ! Thank you for sharing your talent with us i can't wait for the next chapter.
Soulshard