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Gevisa my friend, don't worry i'm still here.I'm touched that missed me .Unfortunately reality caught up with me again hence my absence and for that i apologize. Ok on with the review i hope that you are sitting comfortably because this is going to be a long one. Firstly thankyou for continuing this saga (if i could afford it i would pay you to write just for me !).I love the detail in the drowning and the obvious research that went into the part about hypoglycemia and low blood sugar levels. Also i cannot wait to find out what she really said to Victor whilst they were in Hell.

In chapter two it was a nice point on how other peoples attitudes change when Joviana's status changes,i guess that this is something that she will have to get used to.The "am i paranoid ? " question was handled very tactfully i thought but i'm not sure that i could have kept a straight face whilst answering though!

On to part two of my belated reviews the descriptions of Peter and Betty were short but you captured their personalities very well it was a good introduction for two new characters in the story.I had no idear that it was so hard for tall women to find clothes to fit them, i'm 5'1" and have to cut about 6" off trousers and skirts just to get them to fit.Peter is nice but a bit on the dull side (when his not fighting crime of cause), your right Victor is much more exciting.I do have one quick question if i may what is Joviana's official title ? Lady/Mrs ?
As with Peter and Betty very neat introductions for She-hulk and Wasp, i enjoyed the background between Janet and Joviana when they were children.Either Joviana has changed drastically over the years or Wasp is quite dense i'd like to think that it was a bit of both.Our heroine is quite the liar/storyteller isn't she no wonder she is so good at her job.

On to the final part of my reviews in chapter five it was a great use of designer names and the fitting room part was fun i suppose that having nice underwear will help to boost her self-confidence, when you look good you feel good. By the way i'm dying to find out exactly what Victor does wear under his armour (until you tell us i'll just amuse myself by thinking about the possibilities boxers,briefs,thongs...nothing !)
As the story goes on it is easy to see that Joviana's loyalty to Victor is very strong but i can't help but wonder which is stronger her loyalty or her morals ? The magnet part was really funny as with the fruit basket joke it was well delivered. I think i covered just about everything i would add more criticism but i cannot find anything to criticize.
P.s on a completely unconnected topic are you by any chance a Terry Prachett fan ? I think i've just realised where your screen name comes from is it from "Going Postal" ?

Hi again loved the chapter it is totally fun to go shopping with the girls ans comprare just about6 everything hope to see what vic thinks of jo new outfits soon, keep up the great writing and hope to see another chapter up from you soon :-)

Im speachless, I cant think up enough compliments for this story, not only does it just get better and better but your writing style and the way you draw me in with your words is amazing, this story is just wow.

Totally cool chapter love the way that you gave the cornflakes interpetation within and the gal pals is a great title worked well keep up the great writing and hope to see another chapter up from you soon!

Huzzah! please excuse the lateness of my review- life snuck up on me. I deeply enjoyed Doom's proposal in chap 1. Given the way you've written him, it seemed out of character that he would knight Jovi for saving his life and leave it at that. I wouldn't expect her to become the new Boris, but still something! You seem inclined to make more mysteries per chap, not fewer. (gr) chap2 "Am I paranoid?" Thank you, thank you, thank you, for giving me that moment. It was so hard not to imagine Jovi's reply as either "Paranoid? YOU?? *Never*" or insane laughter. Or both. But I would have loved to read Doom's account of his feelings in more detail. Chap 3- More mysteries?! Why was she being kidnapped? How did she find out who Spider-man was, if not thru personal deduction? Why are all OC's really tall? Will we ever know?

also, I would just like to add my wholehearted support for the fruit basket idea. Please go thru with it! It has potential for a) conversation about the relative paranoia of Reed and Doom by their lovely wives, b)comic relief at the wedding, and c) there is no c). I'm also dying to see what the Richards give as a wedding present. (a bomb? a shoe rack? something far more sinister than either?)

Yea another wonderful chapter loved the way of showing Jo's thoughts on peter and bringing him into the story hope to see another chapter up soon!

I like the way you incorporated Spidey into the storyline, without him hogging the spotlight. Very nicely done.