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Hmmm...I allowed for artistic liscense until the final chapter.  After that, all I got to say is

 

GET THERAPY and that goes double for any of the on-line people who agree with you.

Wow!That's all I can say about this story.I hope you go on with this story.

Oh my gosh. This is actually harsh enough that it's outside my comfort-zone and I won't be able to finish it. Different strokes for different folks, as they say. It's too bad, because you actually have really good quality of writing, and for what my opinion is worth, I think you've got talent. I'll be checking out your other work when I get the chance!

Hey man, I've been a long time fan of this fic of yours. But recently I've been wondering, could it not be possible to let Mary Jane live, and only give Peter the false notion that she's dead? this would open alot of possibilities... or if you allow, could I write a sequel for this fic based off the prompt that Doc Oc did not really stab Mary Jane, merely caused her enough pain to shriek, but kept her alive for god know what other form of torment there is?

of course, my eloquence is no where near that of yours, but I would be honored if you read my fic on Lara Croft and gave your opinion on it (titled "The Reality of Lara's Legend", recently updated.)

Very lovely ending.

Shock factor yes (in a sick and twisted way) enjoyable fic? No. And one thing I've learned is that you can't trust your friends with your fics cause you can't know if they're being honest with you or trying not to harm your feelings. If there is a sequel then just make this one of those 'it was all a dream' cause at least THEN this fic would make some sense.

i think you should do a peter's revenge

Okay normally you updated by now so either you're too busy or you're rewriting chapter 3 (I kind of hope so that was too brutal for my tasts) also if you are making another story about Ulitmate Spider-Man please don't make it linked to this story make it it's own cause I'm not sure I can read the rest of this if you keep going at this rate. Maybe just adjust the new fic so it's seperate from this if you can. Since I think you said it wouldn't be as dark as this it might be for the best if you do.

Chapter 3

Okay WTF!? That was too over the top brutal I mean how the hell is this hideout all of a sudden filled with all the items they would need for this? I doubt they sent shoping for this stuff or carried it with them when they picked this place. Come on at least try to be a little realistic here. Plus wasn't the wire a bit over the top? I'm actually hoping they kill her just to put her out of her missery cause there is no way she could live with hereself after all this shit. If this happened to you could you live with it? Hell if she does live with this she would be so traumatised that they would have ot put her in a mental hospital for years before she could even want to go outside. That and the fact all those wounds and blood loss will kill her.

Well that was sicker and darker then anything else. Just wondering if you over did it a little given that you can loose only so much blood before you pass out and die. Sequel huh? Well I hope it's not as dark as this.