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October 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good story dude!! I check this story everyday to see if you've updated! PLEASE update soon!!
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October 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well things are getting tense but I actually hope she dosen't die at the end of this thing I mean Gwen was already killed off by then I think (which still pisses me off they did that). I do wonder if at the end Peter while in search of her comes to the factory.
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October 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*anticipates*
You do a great job building tension in this chapter.
*on to the next!*
You do a great job building tension in this chapter.
*on to the next!*
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October 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Another very good chapter. Poor MJ. *evil laugh, no sympathy* I can't wait to see what part Ock is going to play.
A few tiny things I noticed: you need to be a little more careful editing. The only mistakes are ones that a spell-checker won't catch, like 'till' for 'still' and 'it's' for 'its.' Nonetheless, great job!
A few tiny things I noticed: you need to be a little more careful editing. The only mistakes are ones that a spell-checker won't catch, like 'till' for 'still' and 'it's' for 'its.' Nonetheless, great job!
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October 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well this is dark and yet somehow interesting fic so far. I'm actually can't wait to see what happens next in this. Keep it up and update as soon as you can.