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October 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOW! I gotta say I'm really impressed with this story. I love it! I really like Carrie too. Can't wait for chapter 5. Update soon!!
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October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Keep it up! But put in some "action" already please!
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October 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
so good i cant wait to read the next chapter but im not pushin lol much lol .
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October 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Really good, you got my interest
Hope we will learn what append to Donnie, Mike and sensei...
more sone pleeeeeeease *puppy eyes*
Hope we will learn what append to Donnie, Mike and sensei...
more sone pleeeeeeease *puppy eyes*
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October 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I had a lousy day today and was in dire need of a pick-me-up, and lo and behold I find out that you updated this wonderful little fic! It's, like, cosmic or something. ^_~
I was really digging the characterization in this chapter. Raphael was acting like a complete ass, although I can't really blame him, considering everything that's happened to them recently. Leo's personality was perfectly done, from his calmness in the face of Raph and Carries' temper, to his obvious concern for his family, and even to the way he stiffened under Carrie's spontaneous embrace. I'm also liking Carrie more and more as a character, because she seems very real to me. Endearing yet flawed, just like the rest of humanity.
And so THAT'S how they arrived at Carrie's place! Poor guys... I fervently hope that the others are all right. @_@
And never fear! Take as long as you need to develop the plot, for like I said earlier, it makes for a better story in the long run. When you get through with the story, however, you might want to consider also posting this one on FFnet. You'd have to cut out the more graphic sexual bits, but I think the people there would like it. Anyways... Hurry up with the next chapter, please! I can't wait to find out what happens next!
I was really digging the characterization in this chapter. Raphael was acting like a complete ass, although I can't really blame him, considering everything that's happened to them recently. Leo's personality was perfectly done, from his calmness in the face of Raph and Carries' temper, to his obvious concern for his family, and even to the way he stiffened under Carrie's spontaneous embrace. I'm also liking Carrie more and more as a character, because she seems very real to me. Endearing yet flawed, just like the rest of humanity.
And so THAT'S how they arrived at Carrie's place! Poor guys... I fervently hope that the others are all right. @_@
And never fear! Take as long as you need to develop the plot, for like I said earlier, it makes for a better story in the long run. When you get through with the story, however, you might want to consider also posting this one on FFnet. You'd have to cut out the more graphic sexual bits, but I think the people there would like it. Anyways... Hurry up with the next chapter, please! I can't wait to find out what happens next!
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October 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow - I really don't know how, when, or who whom the sex will occur, and right now I don't even care! Your plot is excellent! I hope you don't leave us hanging too long about where Splinter, Mikey, and Don are....
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October 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting. Keep it up!!
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October 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wee! More 'Writings'! I hope your updates are always this prompt, for if that's the case then you will have made me a happy person indeed. ^_^
This chapter was wonderful, as if seems we can expect from you. Leo and Carrie's conversation seemed very natural, awkward and vaguely hostile in all the right places, before warming up nicely as the two became more familiar with each other. I love that Raphael's temper and mistrust will be a thing to fear in this fic, and that Leo understands his brother well enough to insist that he accompany her. Although I do wonder why Leo didn't insist upon using Carrie's phone as soon as he awakened, just to make sure that the others were all right. Ah, well; I'm sure that all will be explained soon enough.
Hm, I can't wait to see who Carrie's love interest will be. I lean towards Leonardo at the moment, simply because he is the more trusting and laid back of the two (and he's my favorite, so I can't help but hope), but this could just as easily be a Raph romance in the making. Or perhaps both of them, since I freely admit that I'm a sad, strange individual. ^_~
Anyway... I read it, I loved it, I'm asking for more!
This chapter was wonderful, as if seems we can expect from you. Leo and Carrie's conversation seemed very natural, awkward and vaguely hostile in all the right places, before warming up nicely as the two became more familiar with each other. I love that Raphael's temper and mistrust will be a thing to fear in this fic, and that Leo understands his brother well enough to insist that he accompany her. Although I do wonder why Leo didn't insist upon using Carrie's phone as soon as he awakened, just to make sure that the others were all right. Ah, well; I'm sure that all will be explained soon enough.
Hm, I can't wait to see who Carrie's love interest will be. I lean towards Leonardo at the moment, simply because he is the more trusting and laid back of the two (and he's my favorite, so I can't help but hope), but this could just as easily be a Raph romance in the making. Or perhaps both of them, since I freely admit that I'm a sad, strange individual. ^_~
Anyway... I read it, I loved it, I'm asking for more!
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October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh, very well done! I enjoyed reading this, and I am quite gratified that you're taking the time to develop a plot before getting down to the sexual bits. Those are fun, naturally, but can often be made better with a little time and effort. So thank you for writing what promises to be quite a fun read and please update soon! ^_^