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October 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
omg. AMAZING wrtiting! 5 stars all the way! Please keep it up. O.O ...omgomg! I can't wait to see what happens! *runs off to work on fanart*
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August 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This story is amazing, hot and I totally love both slut!Peter and romantic!Peter/Flash angle. :D
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yay new chapter! Yay tentecles! That is all.
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August 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Grammar aside, still fan-freaking-tastic, Mr. Naughtyboy. Can't wait to see even more of this fantastic stuff.
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August 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Interesting! I look forward to seeing how Flash takes this.
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August 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wee! Tentacle spankings! *molests Otto*
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August 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey, one more thing. I hope you don't take this wrong, because I really do like this fic. In fact, I didn't even really notice this the first time I looked through it, so that must mean something. Anyway, the puncuation is a little rough in some of the dialogue.
For example, instead of: "The dialogue spoken" said the speaker.
It should be: "The dialgue spoken," said the speaker.
Or if the sentence ends without a 'said the speaker,' just put: "The dialogue spoken."
Do you know what I mean? I hope I don't come across as patronizing, I'm just trying to help you make a good fic a little better. I'm sure my stories aren't perfect either.
For example, instead of: "The dialogue spoken" said the speaker.
It should be: "The dialgue spoken," said the speaker.
Or if the sentence ends without a 'said the speaker,' just put: "The dialogue spoken."
Do you know what I mean? I hope I don't come across as patronizing, I'm just trying to help you make a good fic a little better. I'm sure my stories aren't perfect either.
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August 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 1
Hm. Interesting. I was mostly drawn in by the words "Norman," "Sinister Six," and the code "tent." Oh, and the little bit of non con. I'm still intrigued, but the thing between Peter and Flash seemed a little sudden. I did, however, like the metaphor about playing Gran Turismo on Peter's stick, or however that quote went. I think you know what I'm talking about, anyway. Good description during the sex scene. Well, onto the next chapter.
Hm. Interesting. I was mostly drawn in by the words "Norman," "Sinister Six," and the code "tent." Oh, and the little bit of non con. I'm still intrigued, but the thing between Peter and Flash seemed a little sudden. I did, however, like the metaphor about playing Gran Turismo on Peter's stick, or however that quote went. I think you know what I'm talking about, anyway. Good description during the sex scene. Well, onto the next chapter.
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August 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 2
Heh. Incestuous Goblin Love... But, Norman's a sick bastard, and that's one of the reasons I love him so much. I'm hoping the tentacle part will involve Harry in some way, but I guess I'll have to keep reading to find out. As far as the part with Peter and the Enforcers, I usually like a little more insight into the psychology of characters. I don't think Peter would have just went "Fine, fuck me, that's cool." But to everyone their own style. Anyway, next chapter...
Heh. Incestuous Goblin Love... But, Norman's a sick bastard, and that's one of the reasons I love him so much. I'm hoping the tentacle part will involve Harry in some way, but I guess I'll have to keep reading to find out. As far as the part with Peter and the Enforcers, I usually like a little more insight into the psychology of characters. I don't think Peter would have just went "Fine, fuck me, that's cool." But to everyone their own style. Anyway, next chapter...
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August 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 3
This really is getting better and better. Seriously, I'm sucked in. It has even covered my desire to see more of what Peter's thinking through all of this. Now, I'm a huge Otto fangirl, with Norman a close second. My favorite pairing is Otto/Norman. I don't suppose you could do something like that, hm? Please?
This really is getting better and better. Seriously, I'm sucked in. It has even covered my desire to see more of what Peter's thinking through all of this. Now, I'm a huge Otto fangirl, with Norman a close second. My favorite pairing is Otto/Norman. I don't suppose you could do something like that, hm? Please?