rate_review Reviews

I agree; I can't understand why this is oneshot-your story is much to short. I was looking forward to what happens next. Please update or at least edit so the reader knows what happens. Does she escape??? What about her clients? And who is the villian and why is he doing this??

Hi, I'm not good at constructive criticism but honest opinion was that this story was entertaining but it's too short! Lady Death gave in far too quickly and easily for the character, or at least it comes across that way because of the very brief descriptive text and what feels like not enough emotional description. On a minor technical note, you've got her as 'Lady death' once or twice instead of as 'Lady Death,' which is nitpicking, but from other comments I've seen people seem to notice nitpicky things in character names! (It's not just me!)

Hope you do more stories on this theme.