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Oh phew! Wow, I'm so glad I found this. Well done, and thank you for sharing. 

ok. thers this thing you said in the comments back to one of your reviewers that ladies might want to skip it. i disagree. as a cjick, litterally just reading that made me almost cum. super fucking hot and sad that there isnt more.

It was an interesting choice to make the first chapter so cold and clinical, to show the contrast between a simple backseat rut and a proper fucking. I feel like these chapters are turning points in a larger story, and a small part of me is curious to know what that story might be.

You definitely could have made this a lot harder to find. I didn't even need to email you to find it, but I'm sure you knew that it wouldn't be too difficult. Great job though on the story, I love it. It's really well written and the plot's great; I'm really excited to finish it and read more of your writing. I know I probably should have left this brief er... 'review' on fanfiction but yeah you're amazing, the story's amazing, and I love this pairing. Job well done sir.

Amazing! I've been reading your stuff on fanfic and this is no disappointment. Your attention to detail and not rushing anything is what makes this story great.

First off, sorry about the fake name. I generally don't like sharing my real one with most people. Now that we've got that out the way way, this is one of the best Fanfics I've read, and the term doesn't really do it justice. When I think of a Fanfic, I think of usually some bullshit love story, some cheesy action, or a horrifically written sex story. Here though, I'm drawn to the characters, I didn't feel compelled to read the lemon because "that's the best part," I felt compelled to read it because it wouldn't do the story justice if I didn't read all of it.
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The only problems I notice with your story really is the lack of being drawn in during combat, though you warned us several times beforehand that that would likely happen, and the occasional grammatical issue, which everyone has.
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In the end this is a well written story that I'd recommend to my friends if they wouldn't look at me strangely for becoming quite addicted to a romance story between characters from a cancelled T.V. show. Granox Firewind, signing off.

Yeah, that was something living. Not like the previous example. Perhaps you should switch the names of the chapters?

This was well-written and just the sort of missing moment that the story called for. I liked Aqualad's lone thought, 'up until this point it's still my fault.'

Yup. As clinical as I expected from this soulless+unfeeling relationship.

Been watching out for this for days, BTW. On this profile, not the ff.net one.

Hope to see something with a bit more life in a few chapters.

P.S. I think it is customary to add "the Missing Scenes" or something like that to a fic title in such cases.