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for Stargirl: Black Bred White Bread

by JayDee

person Anonymous
schedule April 18, 2022 at 12:00 AM
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person Anonymous
schedule November 1, 2016 at 12:00 AM

I've read a few of your stories now, by and large the content tends to be a little too extreme for me, but I do quite like your writing style. This story in particular I think managed to keep a good pace and not become too fantastical to not be taken seriously. Though there were a few glaring spelling and grammatical errors I could do without, overall I think I'd like to see more from you. :)

person Anonymous
schedule July 27, 2016 at 12:00 AM

This was quite nice, but next time when a heroine is unshakled she won't be so receptive. No matter how much scared she is

schedule January 22, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Well, you asked so kindly for a review. I'll give you some of my thoughts... And the first thing I want to mention is, I've read most of your stories, and, well, sometimes you go a bit too far. In this case pissing on someone just seems like insult to injury. I know it's a fetish and that's cool. But it seems like nearly everyone of your fics has a fetish that might just plain turn off a casual reader. I'm not saying you should stop, I enjoy most of your fics, but it's a trend that has become predictable in your writing. But that's just my taste in writing speaking and you can ignore it if you want...

Other then that I really enjoyed this.

Another thing I'd like to mention; most of your stories seem to have Bad Ends (as in the unhappy kind). So, I'd like to cast my vote on an ending for this one; Stargirl escapes and brilliantly murders her captors, or hires Deathstroke to do so, and rather then return to her old life she becomes a Super Villain! This would be a fitting back story to a villain.

Or the Bruce Wayne ending. It'd be interesting to see him react, or a really Bad End... He fails to recognize her as Stargirl.

No matter what you go with I'm sure it'll be worth reading.
person Anonymous
schedule January 2, 2016 at 12:00 AM
I thought that the three chapters here set up a nice story of humiliation, one a bit less gory than some of your other stories. Look forward to seeing what idea you come up with for the final chapter. I'd say not to do the cliche porn ending, either, but of the other options I'm not sure which'd be funniest and most twisted. Probably the one with Power Girl just for LULZ.
person Anon
schedule November 25, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Fuck, really good work dude. I have been a fan of your stuff for a long time. I think the typical porno ending would be a bit too cliche for something like this, but I wouldn't mind seeing it. Do you think you'll do anything with Power Girl in the future? She's another one of my favorites. Again, great work man. Keep it up.
person freelunch
schedule November 12, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Hi JD

I'm not writing specifically about this story but just in general. I've been enjoying your work for about the last five years now. I don't read all of them nor do I manage to fap off on them all the time. What I like depends heavily on the theme and characters used. For me, it's regular guys dominating powerful women like this story here. Regardless, I'm quite impressed with the range of stories you tell and your writing skills but most of all, every one of your stories I've read, you managed to surprise and sicken me(in a good way) with your innovative concepts and descriptive writing on the torture and humiliation scenes.

Hope you're not too discourage from the lack of responses to your stories. It doesn't seem like a very rewarding experience in that regard but I'm sure there are a bunch of other lurkers like me who enjoy reading your stuff. I hope your creative juices keep flowing!