I love the concept here! Harley hitting Batman with an aphrodisiac, and forcing him to reveal his identity by disabling his suit, leading to Harley roping in Bruce Wayne into giving her a love-child.
That said, the grammar could use a little work,as well as the dialogue; The constant "heheheh" by Harley was a little off-putting, could have used a little more build-up in the parts between Batman and Harley as well.
That being said, the concept is terrific! My stories are pretty rough and I'm not about to act like they don't have flaws.
Would like to see it cleaned up a bit, because the idea is a great one! Story just needs to be tweaked a bit. Great start, hope to see it reimagined.
The spelling and grammar is atrocious
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