Pretty good, just needs some grammar checking.
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Pretty good read. Though the story could simply end how it is, I'd like to see more of a resolution for BB instead of him being damned to a life of eternal cuckery.
nay
Kiss yourself
meh ...
You are a fucking asshole
This was really well done, you did guys good. Keep up the good work.
Should've made it to where bb actually fucks raven
Heres the skinny. The writing was amazing. I very much enjoyed the vocabulary and the sentence structure was digestable and easy to follow. I say next time, lighten up on the hentai speak, and go more into ravens, or whoevers, desperation for the dick. Maybe add a little foreplay, ass shaking, teasing and the like. I did enjoy the ending scene, humaninzing the guy she was fucking