rate_review Reviews

Where do I begin, Malcore? I haven't read most of your stories because of blatant spelling errors in the summaries. If you can't get that right... I read this one because I was hopeful that it was a story I'd enjoyed a couple years ago.

I was right, but I really wish I wasn't. The idea is good, but the execution, the pacing, and the structure all make me cringe. The narrative rambles and goes off on unrelated tangents, the dialogue is stilted and forced, and they talk so often that it detracts from any possible pleasure a story like this offers.

I won't even get into the Aqua Lad plotline.

Good day -
Xander Cruize

now may that be a lesson, if you peak, you get raped

Gods, that's hot

when will we get an update?!?!

PLEASE update! [makes sad puppy face]

woot nice chapter!

Alright then diregard my advice completly and satisfy your need to write your story by a stale old structure.
I'm done.

if only we had pics

fuck that green bitch up!

Hopefully something new will come out of this.
I really hope it's not the same old contrived story of Beast Boy being raped by (a)dickgirl(s)...
I swear I've seen the whole "Beast Boy learns his lesson by being sodomized" plot ad nauseum.
But, it is your story and you may disregard my remark if you wish.
Whatever you wish to do, I look foward to reading the next chapter.